Thursday, October 16, 2008

Revisions

Hi, so here are my revisions for cut. and I have two for broken, broken_1 and broken_2. and yes, that's me this time. haha. The other picture was cropped on both sides, so I couldn't do much with it. Also, the green box for both broken magazines would be flush with the edge. Any suggestions before I print?

3 comments:

Ryan said...

Cut: This is much improved. I really appreciate the interaction between the image and the masthead. Colors are well-chosen, although I'd test my print to make sure there's enough contrast with the red on the gray field.

Features are handled quite nicely. Perhaps the section that starts with "plus" should be moved up slightly to evenly split the space between the image and the indicia (price, etc.)

I'd consider adjusting the levels in your image just a tiny bit to improve the contrast.

Broken: Great image. I like that you've included yourself in it. I'm not totally sure about the oatmeal heather t-shirt with the headwrap...it shows cross-cultural interaction, but I don't think it's as interesting as the rest of the photo.

In terms of which one is working better, I'm on the fence. I like the smaller image because it holds the text well, esp. the slogan running across the forehead. It's smart, and reinforces your concept. I'm not totally crazy about the negative space to the left, but that might be alleviated with a small adjustment.

I also think this image needs the contrast boosted...there's no real solid black, and it makes the image feel a little soft in general.

Great work so far!

-Ryan

Kailie Parrish said...

Thanks, yeah the contrast in both the jpeg images posted are more gray than the actual file on illustrator. haha, and the shirt... had an American flag on it. I'll change it though, I get what you're saying.

Andrew said...

Nice job on these Kailie.. your hard work shows! Ryan and I were looking at these together and his comments cover everything I'd suggest but just wanted to say good job!